ugapa
06-20-2010, 05:42 PM
-Call of Winter: "Tundra has lived alone so long he has formed bonds with the birds and wildlife of the mountains."
put a "that" in between "long" and "he"
-Piercing Shards: "...deadly spikes at a whim, letting him unleashing two waves..."
"unleashing" -> "unleash"
"fight" -> "fights"
put a "that" in between "long" and "he"
-Piercing Shards: "...deadly spikes at a whim, letting him unleashing two waves..."
"unleashing" -> "unleash"
"fight" -> "fights"