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KerliKoiv
05-09-2010, 04:34 PM
Original:
No greater shame has the Beast Horde than the Demented Shaman: one of their holiest priests, an initiate into their deepest secrets and greatest lore, who betrayed his people and turned to join the Hellbourne. He is a force of corruption and outrage, draining the life of the land to heal those who would destroy it and defeat those who would defend it.

Revision:
No greater shame has befallen the Beast Horde than the treachery of the Demented Shaman: one of their holiest priests, an initiate into their deepest secrets and greatest lore, who betrayed his people and turned to join the Hellbourne. He is a force of corruption and outrage, draining the life of the land to heal those who would destroy it and defeat those who would defend it.

Justification- The phrase: "no greater shame has the beast horde" is in simple terms correct, but sounds fragmented and is overall kinda sloppy. Even if this thread doesn't get approved, hopefully the S2 team will take note and change it real quick.


Update: I know this doesn't have a poll, but after consideration, this really does not need a poll as it is just a suggestion that changes the game in no real manner.

sage62
05-09-2010, 04:51 PM
Is this really even worth mentioning?